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You can make a simple milk tea in a various of ways. It's traditionally made with red tea leaves, but you can use any flavor you like (with the exceptions of oolong or green teas, since their tastes don't complement milk). The same holds true for what ever milk you prefer – you can use whole, low fat, skim or even coconut milk. To make the tea sweet, insteading of sugar, try honey. There are 7 steps to make a milk tea. 1) Bring 1 cup of water to boil in a small pot. 2) Put 1 teaspoon of your favorite tea leaves and put it in the boiled water. 3) Brew the tea for two to five minutes, depending upon how heavy you'd like it to taste. 4) Remove the tea leaves, add 3/4 cup of milk of your choice to the tea. 5) Return the tea to a boil and remove it immediately to prevent scalding the milk. 6) Hold a small strainer over a large mug cup and strain the tea into it. 7) Add the sweetener of your choice in whatever quantity you prefer to the tea and blend it with the teaspoon. Then enjoy your milk tea!
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【短语错误】
改为a variety of或various.
【表达错误】
红茶应该为black tea。受中式英语影响。
【单复数错误】
这个词不能用复数,因为是不可数名词。
【词语错误】
what ever应该合起来为whatever,或者可以用no matter what。
【词语错误】
应该是low-fat
【短语错误】
instead of是一个副词短语,没有分词形式。
【代词错误】
应该是them,指代前面的leaves。
【分词错误】
应该用boiling water表示沸水。
【搭配错误】
taste strong(味道重),不能用heavy。这是明显的中式英语。
【逗号错误】
前面应该加一个and;或者前面用句号,add首字母大写。
【中式英语】
“马克杯”就是mug,而不用加cup。

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本文写作思路较为清除,步骤环环相扣,指示性语言较容易理解。同时本段话的第一句是主题句,其余的句子都在围绕一个中心(如何制作奶茶)。所以本文写作质量不错。但是要注意进一步避免中式表达的影响。
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