Transition and Coherence (2)

　　A paragraph is coherent when its ideas flow smoothly from sentence to sentence and when the reader is able to follow the train of thought without disruption.

　　Read the following paragraph and determine whether it's well written or not. If your answer is no, point out the problems in the writing.

　　English corner is a place for foreign language learners to communicate in foreign languages. It's good to practice speaking ability. Foreign language learners have few chances to practice speaking ability; many foreign language learners can't speak. They may have studied the very language for more than ten years. So they have a high level of writing, reading, and listening.

As you may have discovered, the thoughts do not flow logically. Here is an improved version.

　　English corner is a place for foreign language learners to communicate in foreign languages. It's a place designed to practice speaking ability, because foreign language learners have few chances to speak with native speakers. So English corners are a great help to the students who may have learned a foreign language for more than ten years but remain mute learners, though they may have a high level of writing, reading, and listening.

Please answer the following questions.
1) What words have been repeated?
2) What pronouns have been used?
3) What logic words have been used?

Read the following paragraph; try to insert appropriate transitional words.

　　What explains the growing trend toward delayed childbearing? 4)________, the high divorce rate is making newlyweds think twice about starting a family right away. 5)________, many young couples want to be more financially secure before having children. 6)________, more married women prefer to devote time to their careers before having a baby.